Comments on: Journey of Life

By: Pranjal

Pranjal — Mon, 28 Feb 2011 16:02:18 +0000

i can’t imagine what mother said. But at the end of the Journey Both are With mother so both will be happy. Now what happened is during the journey, is that Jeevan Enjoyed it to full but Jyoti couldn’t. Now i don’t see after geting back home mom is going to punish jeevan for enjoying. So as we see, as a whole, Jeevan has a better time. what do you reckon?

By: Ambi

Ambi — Fri, 04 Dec 2009 14:52:18 +0000

You know, ah…well, I like my critics more than people who praise me…

*booh* yeah, I hear you.

Truly, I do notice the thumbs ups… but I am so used to getting the ‘downs’ on my comments in RC’s posts, it is almost nostalgic to see one again. Seriously.

My question was also a hint, btw, for a probably conclusion but on my terms.

Getting literary ‘thrills’ from the incomplete story is all good and nice, but read between the lines and it pretty much tells your thought flow. And that flow might also the reason why you haven’t yet commented ‘on’ my articles (you did comment ‘in’ one of my article), whereas…

By: mani padma

mani padma — Fri, 04 Dec 2009 13:24:54 +0000

@Antarman, Shilpa, Pins and Ashes, Pramathesh. I am really pleased that you liked the story. I was away for awhile and it made my day when I found your appreciative comments. As for the finishing line,as I have already said, I really really don’t have the idea about what should be the best line. And yes Rajan you are right. somethings are best left unfinished and mysterious. BTW thanks for covering up for me inmy absence.
@Ambi- I knew the meaning wouldn’t be lost on you, but instead of an answer I get a question back! You do have a wicked sense of humour . I am beginning to like it and hope to match it in my next article. Hope you take it with a pinch of salt. BTW somebody thumbed up your comment . Have you noticed or you notice only the thumb downs?

By: Dhiman

Dhiman — Thu, 03 Dec 2009 13:02:09 +0000

This is 3rd time I am here actually I don’t think I have the capacity to complete this one so went back every time without commenting … Now I agree to what Lakshmi has said that some stories as best when not finished ….

By: Lakshmi Rajan

Lakshmi Rajan — Thu, 03 Dec 2009 06:19:09 +0000

Nice to know that the story gave you a beautiful feeling to start the day! Am sure, Mani would feel great hearing your feedback!

And your take makes a good end too from mother’s perspective that each one needs to experience and enrich the life in the process!!

By: Lakshmi Rajan

Lakshmi Rajan — Wed, 02 Dec 2009 11:03:49 +0000

heeeheee … Wen I told you to see if you can give your conclusion i was thinking if you can bring any finishing line as what mother would have said that is what Mani had left unwritten…

But then even I find the unanswered portion of mother actually adds to the brilliance of the story and making itself a complete one!

So Mani , i think you have not left anything mid-way, Its a complete thought provoking, brilliant master piece!!!!

Jeevan-Jyothi , Jeevan-Jalwa! Nice names btw !

By: Pins N Ashes

Pins N Ashes — Wed, 02 Dec 2009 09:32:07 +0000

I have been reading this story more than a couple of times since yesterday… and I’m confused as to what Mr R said about waiting for finishing touches! I like open-ended stories, but would love to read the end from u:))))) because it is such a beautiful story…

I enjoyed myself reading it and on to it again, to find out if I missed any imagery or metaphors in the process…
cya

PS: I have a pair of friends brother-sister duo named Jeevan n Jyothi, n another Jeevan n Jwala…:))

By: Ambi

Ambi — Tue, 01 Dec 2009 07:38:56 +0000

“maybe because I doubt if anyone can know this for sure in one’s lifetime”

*chuckle* Your feelings expressed through this article are not lost on me.

Anyway, from a story perspective, where is the father in this story?

By: shilpa

shilpa — Tue, 01 Dec 2009 06:15:26 +0000

That was such a nice post. I felt so nice when i was reading it. I would have also loved to see your take on it as Antarman has said. Please complete it. This article is my first read in the morning and i loved it.It also reminds me of a song, “ye jeevan hai..is jeevan ki..yahi hai..yahi hai dastan…thode gam hain,thodi khushiyan…”

Though I feel that Prakriti would hug him and would tell him that this is what she wanted them to experience.

And it appears to me that this author’s note was not required as this article can’t probably offend or disrespect anyone’s thoughts.

By: Antarman

Antarman — Tue, 01 Dec 2009 04:57:04 +0000

very interesting to read and please complete the story..as I would love to read your take on this issue.