"I won’t… Promise!.. Let me go" He pleaded.
She nodded reluctantly.
In the evening, he broke his promise.
At night he broke her ribs.
"Just leave him!" her mother sobbed
"No !… I will survive anyways. But he won’t if I give up before giving my best", she replied, calmly dialing a number.
"Hello! Alcoholic Anonymous?"
This 55 fiction format story is written by Mani Padma.
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I was tempted to say ‘Good one’, but it strikes so similar as the “all-good angel wifey” theme that congests the gazillion mega serials these days!!
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bah, what’s to lose…?
Nice one!
I am honoured that you decided to change your mind at the last moment.
BTW she did not say that she will not give up but said that she won’t GIVE UP TILL SHE GIVES HER BEST so even after that the thing continues then ……
‘mother India’type story with a solid message…this 55 is hard-hitting and relevant to the times
hey good one
a new topic, not seen lately
Alcoholic Anonymous …. Well I know someone whose a member and helps a lot of people ….your 55-Fiction is very relevant ….good one…
nice one……
I am disappointed! I did no feel the story unlike your other stories.
@Lucky,Dhiman,Chetan,Sharat. Thanks for your approval. Yes I had decided to try out a new theme after loking through the other blogs.
@ Pramathesh. I guess you do have a point. The punch line didn’t have the desired effect. It did feel a bit incomplete or rather unconvincing. Thanks or letting me know the weakpoint. And as I am a die hard optimist and an egotist, I take the rest of your comment ” I did not feel the story…” as a complement.Thanks
It talks about the indian babe, who still sticks with a alchoholic man at the cost of her own life…Poor Indian Lady..